Friday, October 11, 2013

Black

hemmed within the shell
of blackness, complete blackness
   I see silent light
like a hermit's solitude
hovering in a cocoon
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This is my first attempt at Tanka.
Like Haiku, it is also a Japanese form of poetry but a lot older in terms of origin. It has five lines extending up to 31 syllables in a pattern of 5-7-5-7-7.

To learn something new on your own, is happiness.

22 comments:

  1. I've just got back into writing and your work is inspiring...really beautiful stuff <3
    xxxxxxx

    segenswunsche.blogspot.co.uk

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    1. Aw..thanks a bunch love.

      Keep visiting Mirage. :)

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  2. You, my love, have evolved brilliantly. Sheer beauty :)

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  3. Beautiful. Hermit. Cocoon. Blackness. Solitude. <3

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  4. Oh wow! How beautiful was that! :)

    Tanka eh? Will try out. Thank you for letting me know what it is :)

    Love ya! <3

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  5. Beautiful attempt to write a tanka Mirage ... Welcome at Carpe Diem Mirage I hope to read more poems written by you. By the way I am your host at Carpe Diem.

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  6. Breathtakingly beautiful! Thank you!

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    1. Welcome here William. :)
      I'm glad you liked my first attempt.

      Keep visiting Mirage.

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  7. How come I miss your posts?! :-o :-(

    This is so beautiful, I could visualize it! <3

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    1. Thaaaankyou MSM

      I don't know. I hate Blogger. >.<
      You're the third person to say this. Try re-following me once.

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  8. I had commented here days back. :O. How come I dont see it here?!!
    Anyways, loved it and this concept is soooo unique. Never heard about it. Brilliant indeed!

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  9. Haw..I don't know. =|
    Blogger is troubling me a lot lately.

    Thanks a bunch Red.

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  10. Wow this is beautiful. I am trying to learn more and more about poetry and beautiful poems like this really help me :)

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