On the delicate notes of life, I dance away
gradually unfastening
the mismatched ties..
I loose these limbs, open the eyes
shedding dried thoughts on this brightly lit day,
on the delicate notes of life, I lift my head up and dance away.
I lift my head up, they watch me and talk
as the lines on my feet
rub against the cold concrete;
I'm not a puppet honey,
you are a part of my play
on the delicate notes of life, I smirk and dance away.
I swirl around like smoke,
or a gorgeous stroke of brush
softening the wounded area
where the blood once rushed.
Don't stop.. this girl might go astray,
on the delicate notes of this thing called life, I dance away.
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gawd!!!! u r awesome! i just loved it!!
ReplyDeletewhat depth and how profound :)
Ankitaaaaa...thank you for you amazingly sweet comment.
DeleteEvery time I read a new poem of yours I think 'this has got to be my favorite' and you come with a better one and I'm like..'this one is so damn good' and I can't pick a favorite. So they are all my favorites. Basically I have accepted the fact that you will exceed expectations on a daily basis! :D
ReplyDeleteWhile I was typing this comment, I had a thought. I just know you by Mirage. What is thy name, young girl ? :)
Baapre.. You did this to me again, you know! I cannot describe that warm fuzzy feeling, when I read your comment. Ufff!
DeleteHere I'm trying to attain a little bit of anonymity and you're asking me my name. Not fair! :P
Keep dancing away beautifully...and keep writing away beautifully :)
ReplyDeleteThank you!!! :)
Delete"I am not a puppet honey
ReplyDeleteYou are a part of my play,
On the delicate notes of life, I smirk and dance away"
HOW AMAZING ARE YOU WOMAN!
Not as amazing as you. :*
Delete"Don't stop.. this girl might go astray", who else apart from you can coin this beautiful sentence.
ReplyDeleteMake this a song, you shall have magic in your lyrics! :)
Really? Wow.. thaaaaankyou!
Deletei agree with Soumya on that, "Mirage"; i heard this as a song when i first read it too...
Deleteif you don't write music, you should collaborate with someone who does...
it may take a little tweaking, maybe repeating the 2nd stanza as a chorus, but it definitely can work as a song, better than most of the stuff i've heard lately...
when you tour the US with your entourage, save me a front row seat, ok?
That sounds too dreamy.. xD
DeleteBut I feel so happy that you and Soumya find potential in my work. It means a lot.
Thank you so much!
Gulzar bhi fail hai tere aagey. You write magic. No word in my dictionary can describe the beauty of Mirage. :)
ReplyDeleteKeep writing. God bless you.
Yaaaaashi! You know exactly how to make someone super happy. :*
Delete"On the delicate notes of this thing called life, I dance away." - a real beauty ... reading it again and again, and it's equally soothing and fresh every time :-)
ReplyDeleteThat means soooo much to me. :)
DeleteA favorite subject, done justice to :)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad, really. Thanks a bunch!!!
DeleteLoved the little darkness of this one! You weave magic, Mirage! :-*
ReplyDeleteYour comments are one of the best treats for me. :)
DeleteYes!!! Dance away! :)
ReplyDeleteso light and airy. i really enjoyed this :)
ReplyDeleteThanks! Means so much to me.
DeleteI really love the way you make this such an emotive peace but with lots of sprinkles of light. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI always wanted to dance through life but it never really happens.
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ReplyDeleteDance is so therapeutic! Sigh, I have not danced freely for a long time.
Dance is the poetry of feet. It is indeed therapeutic. :)
DeleteIt seriously sounds like a song, you can tune it up. Very beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteThank you missus! =)
Deletethat is very very beautiful
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