Monday, February 24, 2014

Dance Away.


On the delicate notes of life, I dance away
gradually unfastening
the mismatched ties..
I loose these limbs, open the eyes
shedding dried thoughts on this brightly lit day,
on the delicate notes of life, I lift my head up and dance away.

I lift my head up, they watch me and talk
as the lines on my feet
rub against the cold concrete;
I'm not a puppet honey,
you are a part of my play
on the delicate notes of life, I smirk and dance away.

I swirl around like smoke,
or a gorgeous stroke of brush
softening the wounded area
where the blood once rushed.
Don't stop.. this girl might go astray,
on the delicate notes of this thing called life, I dance away.
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34 comments:

  1. gawd!!!! u r awesome! i just loved it!!
    what depth and how profound :)

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    1. Ankitaaaaa...thank you for you amazingly sweet comment.

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  2. Every time I read a new poem of yours I think 'this has got to be my favorite' and you come with a better one and I'm like..'this one is so damn good' and I can't pick a favorite. So they are all my favorites. Basically I have accepted the fact that you will exceed expectations on a daily basis! :D

    While I was typing this comment, I had a thought. I just know you by Mirage. What is thy name, young girl ? :)

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    1. Baapre.. You did this to me again, you know! I cannot describe that warm fuzzy feeling, when I read your comment. Ufff!

      Here I'm trying to attain a little bit of anonymity and you're asking me my name. Not fair! :P

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  3. Keep dancing away beautifully...and keep writing away beautifully :)

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  4. "I am not a puppet honey
    You are a part of my play,
    On the delicate notes of life, I smirk and dance away"

    HOW AMAZING ARE YOU WOMAN!

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  5. "Don't stop.. this girl might go astray", who else apart from you can coin this beautiful sentence.

    Make this a song, you shall have magic in your lyrics! :)

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    1. Really? Wow.. thaaaaankyou!

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    2. i agree with Soumya on that, "Mirage"; i heard this as a song when i first read it too...

      if you don't write music, you should collaborate with someone who does...

      it may take a little tweaking, maybe repeating the 2nd stanza as a chorus, but it definitely can work as a song, better than most of the stuff i've heard lately...


      when you tour the US with your entourage, save me a front row seat, ok?

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    3. That sounds too dreamy.. xD
      But I feel so happy that you and Soumya find potential in my work. It means a lot.

      Thank you so much!

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  6. Gulzar bhi fail hai tere aagey. You write magic. No word in my dictionary can describe the beauty of Mirage. :)
    Keep writing. God bless you.

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    1. Yaaaaashi! You know exactly how to make someone super happy. :*

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  7. "On the delicate notes of this thing called life, I dance away." - a real beauty ... reading it again and again, and it's equally soothing and fresh every time :-)

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  8. A favorite subject, done justice to :)

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    1. I'm glad, really. Thanks a bunch!!!

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  9. Loved the little darkness of this one! You weave magic, Mirage! :-*

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    1. Your comments are one of the best treats for me. :)

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  10. so light and airy. i really enjoyed this :)

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  11. I really love the way you make this such an emotive peace but with lots of sprinkles of light. Well done.

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  12. I always wanted to dance through life but it never really happens.

    /Avy

    http://mymotherfuckedmickjagger.blogspot.com

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    1. It happens when you make it happen.
      :)

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  13. :)

    Dance is so therapeutic! Sigh, I have not danced freely for a long time.

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    1. Dance is the poetry of feet. It is indeed therapeutic. :)

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  14. It seriously sounds like a song, you can tune it up. Very beautifully written!

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  15. that is very very beautiful

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